Simulated Knave wrote:
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I think it's worth mentioning that it's actually the semi-official successor.
What's the semi-official successor to what?
Errata is a plural, IIRC, and so it should be "some errata are missing".
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Several ofs are capitalized where they should not be (1.4.1, 1.4.2, 1.7.3)
Self-planetfall should probably be a hyphenated word.
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5.4.1 is not appropriately indented.
The rule, or the FAQ? Everything looks right to me.
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I think the Steel Legion, Ghazgull's Orks and the Feral Orks could all have their titles easily shortened, which would reduce the ToC by an entire page (Steel Legion Imperial Guard, Ghazghkull Thraka's Ork War Horde and Snagga Snagga's Feral Ork Horde).
Up to the AC's. I pushed a bit on some names but it's their call on their list.
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Should it be the Stigmatus Coven? A covenant is an agreement...
Right, they are Stigmatus Covenant Covens. Apparently someone made an agreement with Stigmatus and they decided to organize their rabble as covens.
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It may fall into "fixing GW's crappy language", but making the titles consistent in the use of the plural would be nice (dangerous terrain tests v dangerous terrain test, for example).
Put forward the edits on the FAQs and we'll see what Neal thinks, I'm not touching the rules though.
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I know you said "no wording", but "move and fire on each other" means that the units are actually moving on top of each other, whereas "move, fire on each other" wouldn't. And it's on the first page...
I think "Each datasheet provides the following information:" should have a period, not a colon. Nesting colons is mean and naughty, as I understand it.
Right on both of them, but I'm still not touching the rules.
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The FAQ notation at the bottom should mention cases like the SM Dreadnought, where it is a choice at the beginning of the game.
I've got a FAQ suggestion for Neal on this for section 5.0.
Simulated Knave wrote:
Why are the italic numerals sans-serif but the rest of the font isn't? This appears elsewhere, and it confuses the hell out of me.
Got specific section numbers?