Page 15, Sentinels entry:
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Sentinel squads consist of one to three lightly-armored mechanized walkers crewed by a single Guardsman each.
Add the underlined bits.
Page 16, Leman Russ Exterminator entry:
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Instead of a Battle Cannon, the tank carries a turret with twin-linked Autocannons, capable of laying down a withering hail of fire.
Pluralize 'Autocannon'. Actually, this brings to mind something I previously missed - weapons should probably be all capital or lowercase. It'd probably be easier to go with the latter. That would mean lowering 'Laser Destroyer' in the Destroyer Tank Hunter entry, 'Battle Cannon' and 'Autocannon' in the the Exterminator entry, and so on.
Page 17, Predator entry:
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Built around the successful Rhino chassis, it the Predator is armed with an autocannon and several lascannons.
Add the comma. Also suggested is deleting 'it' and adding 'the Predator', as it would fill up the bottom row a bit more.
Page 17, Sabre Tank Hunter entry:
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one of the many Rhino variants, these light and cheap units do very little to up-armor the basic frame. Instead, their infantry capacity is replaced with a standard vehicular autocannon, mounted on a turret.
Capitalize 'one', delete the comma after 'autocannon'.
Page 17, Scorpion AA Battery entry:
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Scorpions have robotic brains guiding them. They therefore do not make morale checks, and they may Snap Fire without penalty.
Add a period and 'They' after 'them', delete 'therefore', the comma after 'morale checks', and 'they'. Should read:
'Scorpions have robotic brains guiding them. They do not make morale checks and may Snap Fire without penalty.'
Page 17, Termite entry:
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They are Tunnelers and follow the normal rules for tunnelers.
Capitalize the second instance of 'tunnelers'.
Page 17, Thunderer Assault Gun entry:
As with the Exterminator, lowercase the weapon names if you choose.
Page 18, Mole Mortar entry:
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This is a light artillery piece that, instead of firing the shell in to the air, sends it through the ground to its target; exploding underneath them.
Replace the semicolon with a comma.
Page 19, Earthshaker entry:
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It is an immobile version of the Basilisk gun.
Add 'the' before "Basilisk". Really, I would simply replace this sentence with:
'It is immobile.'
It seems like most people recognize the Basilisk as an earthshaker cannon mounted on an IG artillery chassis, so calling it an 'immobile Basilisk gun' is strange to me.
Page 20, Whirlwind entry:
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Another Rhino variant, this one carrying a multiple missile launcher.
Replace 'carrying' with 'carries'.
Page 20, Marauder Destroyer entry:
'Melta' is capitalized... lowercase that one.
Page 22, Superheavy description:
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Superheavy companies consist of three detachments of one vehicle each.
Pluralize 'detachment'.
Page 22, Gorgon Assault Transport entry:
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Gorgons ignore penalties for moving through wooded and difficult terrain.
Add 'through' where indicated.
Page 22, Shadowsword entry:
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This tank wields a huge gun normally mounted on Titans/ Praetorian known as a Volcano Cannon. This gun has mainly an anti-Titan/Praetorian role, and more than enough to destroy any enemy armored vehicle. The long range of the gun enables the Shadowswords to deploy safely behind the front line and hunt down enemy from a distance.
Rewrite to the following:
'This tank wields a huge gun known as a volcano cannon, normally mounted on titans and praetorians. It is used mainly in an anti-titan role, and is more than enough to destroy any armored vehicle. The long range of the gun enables the Shadowsword to deploy safely behind the front lines and hunt down enemies from a distance.'
This keeps the flow from the rest of the book, where titans were never capitalized. Praetorians should follow suit. 'Volcano Cannon' is lowercased, and 'anti-Titan/Praetorian' was cut down to just 'anti-titan' to adhere to the lowercasing and allow extra space for the other words. I also ditched 'enemy' in 'enemy armored vehicle' because it was redundant. In the last sentence, 'enemy' was pluralized and 'Shadowswords' was made singular.
Page 22, Stormblade entry:
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Stormblades are the Titan-hunters of the Imperium. These special superheavy tanks are armed with enough firepower to engage most types of Titans and Praetorians on even ground. The tank is armed with a plasma blastgun (that is identical to those often used by Reaver and Warhound Titans), as well as several longer-ranged, one-shot missiles. To power its arsenal the Stormblade has a plasma reactor, which will detonate if the tank is destroyed. The radius of the explosion is D6 cm and all those in range are hit on a 4+ and must make an unmodified armor save to avoid destruction.
Lowercase the bolded first-letters in 'Titan' and 'Praetorian', as in the Shadowsword entry. Delete the indicated brackets and add commas after the close bracket, as well as before 'one-shot missiles'.
Page 22, Stormhammer entry:
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Due to its close assault role the Stormhammer possesses heavy armor in the front and sides. When targeted from the rear, the Stormhammer receives only a -1 penalty to its save; from the side – it receives no modifier. Stormhammers also have many sponson turrets for bolters, which make it a living hell to approach the tank for the enemy infantry and light vehicles.
Add the underlined bits. Delete the dash in the reference to modifiers to armor saves taken from side shots. Also, delete 'the' before 'enemy infantry'.
Page 22, Stormsword entry:
Thundercannon is capitalized.
Page 23, Capital Imperialis entry:
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The Capitol Imperialis is the largest of the Praetorian vehicles. It size dwarfs all but the mighty Imperator Titan in size and firepower, and it is protected by 6 Void Shields. It can transport two full companies of any type, including vehicle companies (but not those that include other Praetorians). Multiple firing ports are scattered though outthroughout the Capitol’s broadside, permitting infantry to fire from these positions. All infantry stands that compose a company may fire from one side of the Capitol Imperialis, for a total of 2 companies that may fire in addition to the Praetorian's guns.
Lowercase 'Praetorians'. Add the underlined bits. Delete 'though out'.
Page 23, Hellbore entry:
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This is a gigantic tunnelers capable of transporting a full company of Imperial Guard infantry into battle.
Delete the 's'. 'Multi-launchers' is capitalized.
Page 23, Leviathan entry:
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All weapons on the Leviathan have a 360° arc of fire, except the Doomsday Cannon, which that has a 90° arc to the front.
Delete 'that' and add the underlined bits.
That looks like it... didn't really check the unit cards. Only real complaint I have is that the hit location templates are hard to read on the background.
Wish I had more time to walk through the Chaos book!
 
(I normally don't doctor pics like this, but this project has shown that in a few instances it is necessary in order to get the pics I need. Obviosly some edited pictures have been done more subtly than others.)
