Hi!
Thank you so much for proofreading and posting this ForgottenLore!!!
Primarch
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| Author: | ForgottenLore [ Sun Oct 06, 2013 4:29 am ] |
| Post subject: | Proofreading and editing notes for Core Rulebook |
OK, I have finished going over the main book with my retentive editor's cap on and here is what I found. P7 First full sentence "You have taken...and gave them" tense agreement. It should be either "You took...and gave" or "You have taken...and given" 2nd paragraph, in the middle - "He did not merely copy the imagery we are so fond with," should be "fond of" 3rd paragraph, 1st sentence "no "net" in NetEpic with our" pretty sure that is supposed to be "without" later in that same sentence "a demanding epic community" should have a semicolon after it. 4th paragraph, last sentence "You have let us known" should just be "know" not known. Later in that sentence, delete "consider" and add "is" after "great work" p9 2nd to last line in 1st column "meters of armour and carry" should be "carrying" p11 in the flavor text box, 1st sentence "Hold the bridge at all cost." should be "costs", plural next line "Behind the Imperial trench was" should be plural "were" Likewise, halfway down the box, at the end of a line "exposed position his men was" should be were 2nd to last sentence in the box "Any hope of reinforcements were slim" I think should have a comma after it. (not positive about that though) p13 sentence just before the title "army cards" - "Special rules found...unless it's really cheesy" again, tense agreement, should be "A special rule...unless it's really" or "Special rules...unless they're really cheesy" That s a tough one though because either way that is correct makes the joke not work as well. p14 flavor text box, toward the bottom "into it's evil glowing red eye." The "it's should not have an apostrophe, I think there should be a coma between evil and glowing, and eye should be plural (unless the ork is supposed to only have one eye, but that isn't mentioned anywhere) p15 Place objectives "For small battles (>2,000 points)" that's the greater than symbol, it should be the "<" less than symbol. Infiltration box "Infantry and Walker-class units" add "with infiltrate" after that. In the flavor text box, 1st paragraph "Behind him the his" shouldn't have the "the" p21 the first paragraph on tunnelers needs to be reworded, it isn't very clear p26 step 7 pinning, 1st sentence has an extra "while" in it p32 the description for snap firing in the combat phase should end with "if the target survives it may continue its action" instead of moving as, strictly speaking, models don't move in the combat phase p33 1st paragraph "Once the detachments" should have an apostrophe" p35 last line of the page, in the example. The page ends with an incomplete sentence, it doesn't continue on the next page. p39 Resolution, 2nd paragraph "In the event where the Close Combat" should not have the "were" in it, just "In the event the Close combat" p42 Daemon hunter box "trolls can't regenerate, Pink Horrors don't split into Pink Horrors" one of those "pinks" is supposed to be "blue" (I can never remember which though) p44 ork Gargants, last line, change "matching opponents" to "still a match for p48 - appendix A the example boxes for both morale and pinning class are both missing a carriage return p50 Appendix B Anti-aircraft - "weapons" should not be plural Daemonic - "cause" should be "caused" with a "d" Skimmer - "moved" should be "moves" That's it for the typos, spelling and grammar issues. I'll do the Tau book next, not sure when I'll get around to that though. |
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| Author: | primarch [ Sun Oct 06, 2013 4:52 am ] |
| Post subject: | Re: Proofreading and editing notes for Core Rulebook |
Hi! Thank you so much for proofreading and posting this ForgottenLore!!! Primarch |
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| Author: | ForgottenLore [ Sun Oct 06, 2013 5:35 am ] |
| Post subject: | Re: Proofreading and editing notes for Core Rulebook |
No problem. I forgot one though. On p14, in the flavor text box. Laspistol in the last line is misspelled. |
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